tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post1403093048594113947..comments2023-06-30T04:45:49.516-04:00Comments on Vinalhaven High School English: AP English: The Final Countdown!Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comBlogger105125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-58425764832344450632017-05-02T09:07:57.694-04:002017-05-02T09:07:57.694-04:00• reads the question, notes on what she needs to a...• reads the question, notes on what she needs to answer from the question <br />• read massage and take notes/annotate, summarizes every chunk of text <br />• makes note of setting and vocabulary <br />• write down important quotes that go with a claim <br />• makes note of laity devices- answering question <br />• notices a shift- might be useful later <br />• writes what the shits does and how it's introduced <br />• relates Arun to nature- uses quotes to show relation, notices strong vocab to emphasize meaning <br />• Use 10 mins for pre-write, reread the question to get ready to start <br />• 1st thing- goes back to write thesis <br />• identifies literary techniques in thesis to characterize Arun's experience<br />• hook starts with something relatable, second sentence connects thesis and hook and introduces passage <br />• intro to Arun's feelings, uses setting <br />• explains deeper meaning to key vocab words <br />• connects passage (exchange students) to real world <br />• rereads to remind herself of thesis <br />• rereads every paragraph as soon as she's done with each one to make sure it makes sense and add more to answer the question <br />• takes note of time <br />• connects experience with feelings and actions (hair on neck) connects to real world and relates back to thesis <br />• used all of pre-writing <br />Gilleyannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13072470325495719756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-19027371729726179902017-05-01T12:01:00.161-04:002017-05-01T12:01:00.161-04:00There are so many things to reply to here Evan! I ...There are so many things to reply to here Evan! I like that you pointed out how I continued to revise my thesis as I did my pre-writing. You will notice I did the same thing as I crafted the essay. Lastly, I am flattered I "made it look like a piece of cake," although I promise you, I was doing this exact same process when I was your age! I really enjoy testing/writing in timed settings, and find it very stimulating to jump into a writing task. I hope you were able to see how writing can be made so much easier when you follow some of the same steps I took.Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-63813700317701749232017-05-01T11:57:31.441-04:002017-05-01T11:57:31.441-04:00High-five Gabe!High-five Gabe!Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-44987835927670725472017-05-01T11:56:17.071-04:002017-05-01T11:56:17.071-04:00Excellent question Katrina (and nice observation P...Excellent question Katrina (and nice observation Polina!). Polina is right, I bring up the nineteenth-century because it is a strong example of how the narrator's voice could be different. Many times, you will be given a prompt that asks you to explain/analyze how a third-person omniscient ("all-knowing") narrator relays a story. What's interesting about this passage is that the narrator is limited, *not* omniscient, meaning the analysis will have to rely on less information. Personally, I think the nineteenth-century comment gives AP readers a better sense of my understanding of literature and how this passage fits into that tradition. This is one way to think of Level 3 thinking in your essays.Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-60870682560877810132017-05-01T11:53:46.343-04:002017-05-01T11:53:46.343-04:00Absolutely! I never thought about how re-reading y...Absolutely! I never thought about how re-reading your writing makes the writing faster, but it makes a lot of sense: because you know where you have been, you have a better sense of where you are going with your argument. Excellent point!Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-61468704624176424082017-05-01T11:51:55.490-04:002017-05-01T11:51:55.490-04:00Good point Carolyn. When writing by hand, I simply...Good point Carolyn. When writing by hand, I simply check off (or scratch out) my notes on the prompt since I don't have the option to hit delete.Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-26801933701279977552017-05-01T11:51:16.934-04:002017-05-01T11:51:16.934-04:00Great point Rosie! This is exactly how you show re...Great point Rosie! This is exactly how you show readers you are answering the question being asked!Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-14126834127628547592017-05-01T11:49:47.650-04:002017-05-01T11:49:47.650-04:00This is important. Just getting your ideas *down o...This is important. Just getting your ideas *down on paper* is key. You can always go back and change them towards the end.Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-62065750540771092172017-05-01T11:49:14.343-04:002017-05-01T11:49:14.343-04:00I'm so glad you will make sure to do this Gabe...I'm so glad you will make sure to do this Gabe! It is key to having a clear, solid essay.Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-86206497967312259872017-05-01T11:48:34.125-04:002017-05-01T11:48:34.125-04:00I'm so glad that this makes the writing proces...I'm so glad that this makes the writing process easier for you! Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-16121246233247057122017-05-01T11:46:10.626-04:002017-05-01T11:46:10.626-04:00Yes! You should always go back to your thesis stat...Yes! You should always go back to your thesis statement and check to make sure the content matches your argument at the beginning.Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-16713611470115524072017-05-01T11:45:28.490-04:002017-05-01T11:45:28.490-04:00Thanks spicy-t! Like I said to Nikara (a few comme...Thanks spicy-t! Like I said to Nikara (a few comments above), a lot of what I wrote evolved naturally rather than saying, "I will use point of view, tone, etc." Which literary devices did I use that weren't in the prompt? (I will hand out hard copies of my essay in class tomorrow.)Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-34906083603562483672017-05-01T11:44:17.419-04:002017-05-01T11:44:17.419-04:00Thank you for saying my vocabulary is strong! What...Thank you for saying my vocabulary is strong! What word choice did I use that stood out to you? (I'll hand out hard copies of the essay tomorrow so you can check.)Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-19822777187687839212017-05-01T11:43:39.634-04:002017-05-01T11:43:39.634-04:00Thank you for noting this too Nikara! Did you noti...Thank you for noting this too Nikara! Did you notice how I did not set out to make this observation? Rather, I came to this observation through a slow and steady process of analysis? It's a good example of the level 3 thinking that will help your AP essays receive higher scores.Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-65441561166488827032017-05-01T11:40:17.771-04:002017-05-01T11:40:17.771-04:00Thank you for catching this Nikara! I wish I had c...Thank you for catching this Nikara! I wish I had caught my mistake before I was finished. This kind of small mistake is very common when reading essay questions quickly and immediately jumping into the writing task. Let's discuss how small "mistakes" might effect the overall score the essay receives. Do you think an AP reader would forgive the mistake and look at the "essay as a whole?" Or, would they get caught up on the mistake and score the essay lower? Let's discuss! I'm very interested in your thoughts!Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-2250873251947985872017-05-01T09:46:15.409-04:002017-05-01T09:46:15.409-04:00Instead of leaving thing unmentioned Dr.B finds a ...Instead of leaving thing unmentioned Dr.B finds a way to mention everything and never drifted away from the topic an found a way to connect everything Rosiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16681435690327438171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-87448081650433677742017-05-01T09:45:12.443-04:002017-05-01T09:45:12.443-04:00Dr.B made the essay look easy and also did a real...Dr.B made the essay look easy and also did a really good job with pre-writing because it saves so much time Rosiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16681435690327438171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-29576212674339460332017-05-01T09:44:40.494-04:002017-05-01T09:44:40.494-04:00I believe it's because she trying to reach tha...I believe it's because she trying to reach that universal understanding of the prompt and Arun's POV, and providing the college board readers that she understands how things could be different. Since she knows so much about the 19th century, she can make many interesting ideas that are relevant to the passage.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14173985481779807956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-66361884005430714922017-05-01T09:42:19.757-04:002017-05-01T09:42:19.757-04:00Dr. Brigman's prewriting on the essay's ob...Dr. Brigman's prewriting on the essay's objective and her analysis on the setting is important for forming a thesis and gives her a head start on her essay. She backs up her claims with quotes, including their line number. She's chronologically paraphrasing important lines of the poems to keep in mind. I like that she remember's to point out the shift in the passage, again using a quotes and backing up why it supports her claim. She focuses on the connection between Arun and nature and goes in depth on the vocabulary used. I also like as she continues to prewrite she keeps editing her thesis at the top of the page. Because the thesis needs to be established at the end of the first paragraph, she extends an introduction sentence off of the beginning of the thesis to complete the beginning of her essay. She builds the template to her essay before filling in her claim for each paragraph, and then adding onto those claims as she sees fit. With her experience as an english teacher, she makes it seem like writing an essay is a piece of cake, crafting long detailed paragraphs using her prewriting. Evanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01862978881576060363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-52769742162897563742017-05-01T09:41:50.345-04:002017-05-01T09:41:50.345-04:00Instead of just writing she looks at her time to m...Instead of just writing she looks at her time to make sure she can do everything Rosiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16681435690327438171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-7224293719827603922017-05-01T09:41:48.417-04:002017-05-01T09:41:48.417-04:00Dr. B notices a common human experience in the pas...Dr. B notices a common human experience in the passage and uses it to help her write and prove her point. Hanskieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17013425170774931053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-34968766029873657902017-05-01T09:41:40.910-04:002017-05-01T09:41:40.910-04:00Even though she is limited on time, Dr. B doesn...Even though she is limited on time, Dr. B doesn't get worried on focuses on finishing her essay. She does a good job at prioritizing what needs to be included in her essay, as well as the time she has left.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18114761450000830458noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-45358671498599153082017-05-01T09:41:20.609-04:002017-05-01T09:41:20.609-04:00Dr. Brigman noted that she only had 10 minutes lef...Dr. Brigman noted that she only had 10 minutes left, and made a plan to finish her essay in that time.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06188051439862816438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-87483154307164631212017-05-01T09:41:04.588-04:002017-05-01T09:41:04.588-04:00Dr. B always re-reads her writing. This is very im...Dr. B always re-reads her writing. This is very important and I will definitely do while taking the exam.Gabehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485104837550351595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-25361900373618187162017-05-01T09:41:04.016-04:002017-05-01T09:41:04.016-04:00Dr.B saves time by using some of her pre-writing a...Dr.B saves time by using some of her pre-writing as a paragraphs.Rosiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16681435690327438171noreply@blogger.com