tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post1743659955306965658..comments2023-06-30T04:45:49.516-04:00Comments on Vinalhaven High School English: Writing Workshop with Dr. B.: "A Mind at Work"Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comBlogger64125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-21352977737617074792017-06-01T08:51:09.752-04:002017-06-01T08:51:09.752-04:00She started out by first reading he first two para...She started out by first reading he first two paragraphs. She fixed a few grammar mistakes and fixed part of the wording of her sentence. Fixing the paragraph to make sure it flows as if it was one sentence so it would sound like it makes sense. She added on to her paragraph. She tried to find a word the would sound good with the sentence she was making. She went back to the paragraph and fixed more grammar.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-28164305285619830022017-06-01T08:38:29.316-04:002017-06-01T08:38:29.316-04:00Jeremy is giving good answers for the questions he...Jeremy is giving good answers for the questions he is getting by DB. Giving good explanations for the questions. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03569722471673430892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-56637422349000155372017-06-01T08:22:15.736-04:002017-06-01T08:22:15.736-04:00One thing I see Jeremy doing is when he was going ...One thing I see Jeremy doing is when he was going over his quote he found a grammar mistake he then went back to the book to and found the quote , Once he found the quote he used he read it over and then he looked at the quote which he wrote in his paper and fixed the misspelling of words!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03569722471673430892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-63418448088429268482017-06-01T08:00:50.533-04:002017-06-01T08:00:50.533-04:00I'm so glad you commented on this technique Me...I'm so glad you commented on this technique Megan! It really helps when developing a paper. It's almost like "past you" is talking to "future you" when you return to where you left off. Have you tried this some since we started using this technique?Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-47184096566161997072017-05-31T08:51:01.194-04:002017-05-31T08:51:01.194-04:00Now, Jeremy is clarifying the key term "famil...Now, Jeremy is clarifying the key term "family". Richellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321195661083062560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-90939259551720726862017-05-31T08:49:52.336-04:002017-05-31T08:49:52.336-04:00The fist thing Jeremy is doing is he is answering ...The fist thing Jeremy is doing is he is answering the question "How has Chris Kyle changed?" Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03569722471673430892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-13745073442810432632017-05-31T08:47:41.979-04:002017-05-31T08:47:41.979-04:00The first thing Jeremy is doing with his paper is ...The first thing Jeremy is doing with his paper is answering the question, "How has Chris Kyle changed?" He is also looking through sections of the book to help answer the question.Richellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321195661083062560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-26887207917962269142017-05-31T08:34:43.297-04:002017-05-31T08:34:43.297-04:00She is writing her definition of (family) is and e...She is writing her definition of (family) is and explaining what a lot of other people think family is. Reading over what she wrote again and fixing mistakes and making the paragraph sound better.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-33737802013482478102017-05-31T08:28:02.781-04:002017-05-31T08:28:02.781-04:00She is reading the first paragraph to make sure sh...She is reading the first paragraph to make sure she has an example of family. She is looking over her paragraph and fixing punctuation to make sure it flows good and also changing up the wording of what she already wrote and making it sound better and make sure its talking about her theme of it which is (Family). She also wrote her thesis and wrote about Kyle's military family and his actual family and showed talked about both of the family's and is going to write about how it impacted his views on family.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-39927220356685647042017-05-31T08:26:28.921-04:002017-05-31T08:26:28.921-04:00Other thing I see her doing is she is making notes...Other thing I see her doing is she is making notes to herself in BOLD so the knows to come back to add/make it better! She is also going over it a few times to see if she catches any grammar mistakes.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03569722471673430892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-679875427455171812017-05-31T08:23:00.261-04:002017-05-31T08:23:00.261-04:00The first thing richelle does is she goes over wha...The first thing richelle does is she goes over what she's written and when she was talking about family I thought she was talking aout Kyle's mom and dad but come to find out that she was talking about Taya! So i asked "How would you know Kyle changed when he ws only with his family for a few chapters of the book" Again i though she was talking about his Mom and Dad. So I told her to clarify what family she was talking about!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03569722471673430892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-3482629023942312192017-05-30T08:55:12.578-04:002017-05-30T08:55:12.578-04:00In the beginning is where the "wolves" a...In the beginning is where the "wolves" are the one beating the sheepdogs, But in this case Kyle is the sheepdog and the people over the seas are the "Wolves".Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03569722471673430892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-22377635314579217032017-05-30T08:54:59.066-04:002017-05-30T08:54:59.066-04:00For my paper, my three topics for my paragraphs ar...For my paper, my three topics for my paragraphs are:<br /><br />Paragraph 1: How close Chris Kyle and Taya are in the beginning of the book (I'm going to discuss how his relationship with Taya introduces his ideas of family)<br /><br />Paragraph 2: How Chris Kyle is part of a Navy SEALs family <br /><br />Paragraph 3: How Chris Kyle has changed after Marc's deathRichellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321195661083062560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-35745623655769367682017-05-30T08:54:03.484-04:002017-05-30T08:54:03.484-04:001: How he started as a "cowboy" that wor...1: How he started as a "cowboy" that worked on a ranch. <br /><br />2: How he killed people and earned the name "The Legend" <br /><br />3: He realized he's not super humanAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-24576185311793091942017-05-30T08:51:57.508-04:002017-05-30T08:51:57.508-04:00What is the connection between the "insurgent...What is the connection between the "insurgents" who Kyle fights overseas and the bullies who picked on his brother?Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-65375526358138255462017-05-30T08:47:49.066-04:002017-05-30T08:47:49.066-04:00Part 1: How he was protecting him brother
Part 2: ...Part 1: How he was protecting him brother<br />Part 2: How the insurgents were fighting the marines (With Russian weapons and how they were dangerous)<br />Transition: How ddi it impact Kyle how it changed him<br />Part 3: how his emotions changed when Biggles died (Marc)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03569722471673430892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-35278870964909459222017-05-25T08:53:10.737-04:002017-05-25T08:53:10.737-04:00Now, Megan is writing down in bold, "add impl...Now, Megan is writing down in bold, "add implied meaning" and "add summary sentence"Richellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321195661083062560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-8159456308994797732017-05-25T08:52:54.705-04:002017-05-25T08:52:54.705-04:00Just now, I was really happy to see Megan catch a ...Just now, I was really happy to see Megan catch a typo in her quote from the book when she was reading body paragraph one out loud. Megan wrote, "trued" when she meant "tried." Great job catching that Megan!Dr. Helana E. Brigmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16027313016054803721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-74065563823500351212017-05-25T08:46:56.727-04:002017-05-25T08:46:56.727-04:00She read her paragraphs out loud and found grammar...She read her paragraphs out loud and found grammar mistakes. Also she started doing explicit.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-12593241842694569992017-05-25T08:46:38.708-04:002017-05-25T08:46:38.708-04:00After she wrote down her quote, Megan read it out ...After she wrote down her quote, Megan read it out loud and fixed her mistakes. Now she is writing an explicit explanation of the quote.Richellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321195661083062560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-70793393258226812752017-05-25T08:43:29.085-04:002017-05-25T08:43:29.085-04:00First, Megan read her first paragraph out loud and...First, Megan read her first paragraph out loud and she is now finding a quote for that paragraph to show evidence about how Chris Kyle changes.Richellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321195661083062560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-83469500608428889062017-05-25T08:34:16.768-04:002017-05-25T08:34:16.768-04:00Make sure you dont repeat a word too much.Make sure you dont repeat a word too much.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-41060848014165336412017-05-25T08:34:09.857-04:002017-05-25T08:34:09.857-04:00What I liked about how Dr. Brigman edited her pape...What I liked about how Dr. Brigman edited her paper is when she added more detail outside of the Kyle topic so it wasn't all about Chris Kyle. Richellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321195661083062560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-47224082336276796522017-05-25T08:32:50.334-04:002017-05-25T08:32:50.334-04:00I'll also check to make sure I have a topic se...I'll also check to make sure I have a topic sentence to make sure that it makes the rest of my argument make sense.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5185575413743208030.post-55110590110095487582017-05-25T08:30:26.122-04:002017-05-25T08:30:26.122-04:00I'll also read over my paragraph and fix any e...I'll also read over my paragraph and fix any errors that I had or add more detail.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16096901776719676382noreply@blogger.com